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SNS2 With Commentary

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Hey! Elliot again. And like in scene 1, my comments are in bold.

 

Scene 2

(at college)

Bob: Hey, Jane. How's your classes?

Jane: OK, I guess.

Elliot: WASSUP!!

I remember laughing and yelling at Larry for exploiting me. Oh yeah- Larry wrote this scene.

Larry: Elliot, what are you doing here?

Elliot: Me? I was here all the time. What are you doing here?

Larry: I am the creator of this story.

True, he created it, but I wrote at least half of it. My writing comes later, around scene 5, which I participated in, but didn't fully write. My first me-and-only-me scene is scene 17, but I wrote quite a bit of scene 12. Anyway...

Elliot: (bored) Yeah. I'm the owner of this notebook.

We write all our scripts in a notebook, and on this particular script, I supplied the notebook.

Larry: Oh yeah...

(back to story)

Jane: Has anyone heard from Crissy?

Elliot: No.

Larry: No.

Bob: No.

Jane: Noooooooooooo!

Remember, theunknown told her that Crissy was dead and that she was in danger.

Bob: Hi.

Elliot: What?

Larry: What?

Bob: Uh...

Jane: ...

Larry: OK...

Elliot: OK...

Larry: Why did you say the same thing as me?

Elliot: CONGRATULATIONS!! YOU ENDED THE ONE WORD DRAUGHT! HERE'S YOUR PRIZE!!

(he hands Larry an old, moldy sock)

Larry comes up with the strangest ideas. A moldy sock? One word draught?

Larry: (holding his nose, in nasal voice) Where did you find this? It's gross!

Elliot: I found it in my room today, in the closet.

Larry: Eew!

(he throws it away)

Elliot: Hey! My sock! My dog won't be able to chew on it anymore!

(he runs after the sock)

I think I told Larry I'd kill him for this.

Larry: WHAT?! YOUR DOG?! THAT'S IT! COME BACK HERE!

(he goes after Elliot wielding a knife)

If this "knife" thing was corny, you might want to skip scene 3, because we use it there again.

Jane: OK...

 

Fade to black...

 

Weird, wasn't it? I think so, too. If you liked it, read scene 3!

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